Annotated bibliography

Rachel Wallace

Professor Jordan Hayes

English 1A

June 13, 2014

Word count: 954

I have chosen to study street children worldwide and investigate how this will affect our world's future as well as globalization.

1. North Korean street children

Park, Madison. "Orphaned and Homeless: Surviving the Streets of North Korea." CNN.  Cable    

   News  Network, 01 Jan. 1970. Web. 12 June 2014.  

   http://www.cnn.com/2013/05/13/world/asia/.  north-korea-orphans/

This piece discusses children who are homelessness originally from North Korea.  It discusses their migration mainly to China although some make it into South Korea. This article also discusses shortly life while homeless in North Korea. It also discusses what happens to the children once they leave. This is an article that talks of abandoned children, giving personal accounts of their family stories as well as stories of survival in a sometimes fatal transformer shed through the harsh winters.

This information is useful because it gives in depth details on the children once they leave North Korea. Also of their lives in North Korea.  It discusses some dangers that are involved with these children's everyday survival.

2. Overview on street children's common rights violations

"Orphans." Humanium for Childrens Rights. N.p, d. Web. 13 June 2014.

   <http://www.humanium.org/en/orphans/>.

This website consists of recent statistics such as the estimate of around 120 million street children worldwide. With 30 million children being in Africa, the same amount in Asia, and 60 million in South America. It also discusses the amount of orphans, the numbers being, 31 million orphans in India, 71 million in Asia, 59 million in Africa, and 9 million in Latin America and the Caribbean combined. The amount of orphans caused by AIDS/ HIV is 15 million. HIV kills a parent every 15 seconds worldwide. This information is crucial to my project because it holds a lot of valuable, reliable statistics which are extremely helpful and informative.

3. Romanian Street Children

Andronade, Christina. Romanian Street Children. N.p, d. Web. 12 June 2014.  

    <Http://www.stanford.edu/class/e297c/trade_environment/wheeling/hromania.html>.

  In this essay it gives a detailed history of Romania.  The street child epidemic that happened there is directly related to the countries somewhat recent history.  It gives details of the government structure and really spells out for you why this happened from a few different viewpoints.  The essay also gives an analysis to what should be done, as well as a description of the children and prostitution. These children are homeless and sleeping outside because of laws placed on the people.  They were forced to have at least four children to keep the work force strong, as well as the outlaw of abortion and contraceptives.  The government's regulation on so many children and the outlaw on abortion and contraceptives led to many children being born who could not be taken care. The ones born after the regulated four were given up as well as numerous other children, once the government collapsed in the end of the 80's. Not all children were given up though a lot flee their families because of hunger, abuse (both sexual and physical) , and poverty. But all is not lost, the new government launched a "strategy for protection of children's rights".  Romanian street children were what led me to become passionate about this topic.  Their government has failed them in the worst way.  This has led me to research all street children. The Romanian "angels" are the perfect example of what happens when a country's government fails and how it's citizens suffer.

4. Street children homelessness / world statistics

"Street Children and Homelessness." Street Children and Homelessness. N.p, p. Web. 13 June     

   2014. <http://www.cyc-net.org/cyc-online/cycol-0904-Homelessness.html>.

This group discusses child poverty around the world but it connects everything to children's Rights. It talks about article 27 of the CRC.  Talks of India and Latin America being known for having the largest populations of street children.  It discusses that a lot of children are abandoned because of a disability, and around 90% of all street children use narcotics (includes alcohol and cannabis) most huff glue or paint.  An interesting thing this article brought to my attention was that in 1996, 5.5 million children were considered homeless living in the U.S. And that these children were worse off than homeless in other western societies because the U.S. Is less generous with social programs, the huge income gap between the rich and poor, and the high percent of immigrants and teen mothers. This information is important because it gives me a more in depth look at the rights of a child and how they correlate to the world today.  Also it gives me a bigger picture of the huge problem that is street children today.

5. Indian street children

"Charity for Street Children (Kids), Based in Jaipur, India - Teaching, Volunteer, Voluntry Work -

   Jewellery Making." Charity for Street Children (Kids), Based in Jaipur, India - Teaching,

   Volunteer, Voluntry Work - Jewellery Making. N.p, d. Web. 13 June 2014.

   <http://www.i-indiaonline.

This Indian based group discusses the many problems of Indian street children. It offers personal accounts of children they have personally helped, which is over 3,000 children daily. They cover the topics of child labour, gender discrimination, health, homelessness and poverty.  They also provide an extensive list of programs one of which is a child rights program made just for the street kids. The topics covered by this organization are perfect examples of why these children face what they do. It gives an inside, clear view of what is going on in the life of Indian street children, but with a solution, since it is a NGO.  

Sentence craft

The paragraphs were not indented because it was taken from the blog. It becomes unformatted in doing so.

1) wrong word-benefactors turns into factors

Wrong: These forms of slavery exist because of three major benefactors,

Right: These forms of slavery exist because of three major factors,

2) sentence level error- redundant

Wrong: all the while

Right: cut out 

3) sentence level error- all need to end in ing

Wrong: sharing, offers, presents

Right: sharing, offering, presenting

4) sentence level error-  not sure 

Wrong:gaining a more intimate knowledge of slavery in the 21st century, which he expresses in his speach. All the while backing it up with data from seasoned professionals.

Right:

5) grammar- no noun?

Wrong: Gives an example of when it hasn't, and moves on.

Right: she gives an example of when it hasn't , and moves on.

6) punctuation

Wrong: audiences 

Right: audience's

7) spelling

Wrong: promising

Right: promising

I usually take a whole day to proofread, when I can. Sometimes it can take hours, because I go over the same paragraph repeatedly.  I find proof reading to be a very crucial step in writing an essay. It is where you fix all errors and fing the best way to order and phrase your essay. 

Buffalo Girls

    The documentary Buffalo Girls may seem like a simple portrayal of rural adolescent life in Thailand.  But it all actuality it is a unbiased look at the exploitation of children. These children are being used not only for the money they make engaging in traditional Mui Tai fighting but also for immoral entertainment purposes. This "entertainment" seems to bring the main focus off of the children and onto their money, the Baht. These young children's families get a taste of the fallible success and quickly become dependant upon the uncertain income generated by their child's winnings and the bets placed on the fights. Quickly turning a hobby into an intensely pressured career.  The documentary focuses on two adolescent girls Pet and Stam.  At first glance both girls seem to enjoy fighting but once things progress it is obvious that both girls are enjoying it for reasons most would not find morally or ethically right.  Both girls would be considered "Head of Household" on any United States tax form, being the main bread winners for their entire families.  The once fun sport has turned into a job for them. One unfortunately, where if you don't win, your family doesn't eat.  That is a harsh reality with extraordinary amounts of pressure to be placed on two small children.  These girls should be having fun, they are children.  They should be able to go out and play.  They shouldn't have to intensely train from dusk until dawn.  Or put fighting before their schooling.  But they both do, both girls are put in dangerous situations, both are treated poorly if and when they loose, and both feel sorrowfully guilty when they loose because like Stam sobbed after a loss, "My family needs money".  This directly violates Article 19 (protection from all forms of violence) Under the convention on the rights of a child.  That article clearly states that all children deserve to be free of emotion or physical harm.  Thailand ratified this into their government in 1990, yet nothing is being done to help these poor children.

Planet of Slums: Book Club

Word Count: 241

Planet of Slums by Mike Davis

1) Planet of Slums by Mike Davis is A work of non - fiction.  It is an exploration of the dramatic     differences growing between the North and the South.  Focusing on how most of the worlds population live in shanty towns.  He also explains how the majority of the worlds population are being affected because of Western societies.

2) This book relates to the class through its discussion of human rights, and globalization.

3) This book is 228 pages with the actual novel accounting for 199. (strong content)

4) I came across this text for the first time today. I have never read it.

5) The content is strong in this book, giving a lot of detailed statistics and information in the first 80 pages.  The rest of the book is an analysis.  The pages I sampled were very informative as well as heart wrenching.  An essential book to read from what I have been told.

6) This book is easily accessible online, as well as being available at Barnes and Noble.

7) This book was written in English, with its author hailing from Hawaii.

Nomination:
   
This book is the perfect example of how non productive globalization is affecting our world and what to expect in the future because of our actions in the North.  It describes the hardships of the majority of our world.  Giving us a peak at how our brothers and sisters of the South are forced to live.  

Lab Question #5

  

Summary of Chris Cleave

    In this excerpt it states that Cleave is a best selling novelist as well as a colomist for The Guardian in Londan, England.  It also states his debut novel, written before Little Bee, called Incenidary is critically acclaimed and made into major motion picture in 2008.   Here it also states that Little Bee is only the title of his second book when published in the U.S., with it being called The Other Hand everywhere else. His inspiration for this novel being his childhood in West Africa, and an unplanned visit to a British concentration camp.

http://www.gobookee.org/ebook/b2g-little-bee-public-library-of-cincinnati-and-hamilton-county-gg8cl/

Chris Cleaves Hobbies

    Sailor, Barman, Internet entrepenoir, journalist, teacher of marine navigation.

http://www.gobookee.org/ebook/background-information-reading-group-guide-immigration-gg71y/


Personal Website

    Here you can receive up to date personal information on Christopher Cleave since it is he who maintains his website.

www.Chriscleave.com 

English 1A Final Draft Essay #1

Rachel Wallace

Professor Jordan Hayes

English 1A

April 21, 2014

Word Count : 1,063

Obliterate Modern Slavery

The issue of modern day slavery is one filled with secrecy and sorrow.  It is filled with  infernal corruption, pure hate, and unqualified discrimination.  The official definition of slavery is the utter domination of one human over another.  Often times it involves young, helpless, children forced to work in harsh conditions for no pay.  Other times it is an innocent woman forced to work in the sex trade industry.  These forms of slavery exist because of three major benefactors, rapid population growth, the corruption of local government, and extreme poverty. These topics and explored by two speakers, Sheryl WuDunn and Kevin Bales in their individual speeches presented live to an audience at TEDGlobal 2010.  Both speeches present an argument for change, and are for the abolishment of the modern slave industry.  WuDunn focuses on describing the success that follows the horrific lives of a few select groups of underprivileged women who have been lifted out of poverty by outside benefactors .  Bales quickly acknowledges a few key subjects and their success stories, all the while keeping his main focus and presentation on the need to abolish slavery effectively, permanently, and humanely.  All the while spelling out the exact steps we need to take as a global community to achieve such a goal.  He does this by sharing his personal thoughts on modern slavery, offers expert personal opinions, and presents reliable data.

In the transcript from Sheryl WuDunn’s presentation at Ted Global she discusses many different examples of rags to riches stories created from small outside investments. She elaborates on the details of the sorrow in the women's lives before the donations and then the joy they experience after. The stories WuDunn tells to validate her plea for donations directly pulls at the heart strings.  They make you feel bad and this draws on the appeal to nurture.  You just want to come to their aid and make everything better.  She does this purposefully, and although WuDunn is an eloquent writer, it is obvious she is fishing for donations.

 In the presentation by Kevin Bales, he shares his thoughts of how to combat modern day slavery.  He offers his personal opinions, having visited five different countries from across the globe to track down these hidden societies. In doing this he was able to arrange numerous meetings with the slave owners as well as interview slaves.  He acquired vast amounts of interpersonal reflection through his hands on approach. Gaining a more intimate knowledge of slavery in the 21st Century, which he expresses in his speech. All the while backing it up with data from seasoned professionals. This assuring the target audience its validity as well as the pull of their heart strings from the eye opening facts. Through this Bales appeals to us using many of the basic appeals used for advertising.  He uses the need to nurture when he speaks of the little boys being forced to fish in Ghana.  It was most prominent when he showed the video featuring his ex-slave friend and hero, James Kofi Annan.  The clip portrays a small child with his head deformed from being abused while in slavery.  Annan states, " He was hit with a paddle in the head…" this clearly showing one of the many horrible things that happen to these boys on a daily basis.  

   WuDunn's main argument is that women are discriminated against and need equal treatment not only for their well being but for the improvement and future success of the world.  She validates her claim with many examples of when donations have worked with amazing success stories.  Gives an example of when it hasn't, and moves on.  She uses emotion as a main advertising plea and evokes people's sympathy by arguing and presenting the details most wish would remain covered.  She uses an effective writing format which lets her display all of her main points beautifully in detail while still keeping a professional essay format.  She continues to stay on topic as she evokes her audiences emotions.  Then seemingly leads her audience down a path of discovery with her interesting style.  

   The argument Bales presented was one of a close minded viewpoint.  Bales is closed minded in the best way.  In the way that he can only see what is right and not accept what the opposing party views as logical.  The fact that he can read a flier and find the content so moving that he is willing to change his life and travel to five countries to see slavery from all aspect is inspiring.  If more people chose to get involved in something world changing like Bales the earth would be utterly amazing.  I found this speech to be extremely informative in the regards of a solution rather than really getting in depth into the problems.  I like that.  I think instead of speaking on the negative present and dwelling on the horrible past, it is best to focus on finding a solution for the promacing future.  The fact that there is at least one solution to this horrific problem is encouraging, and if people could get together and realize that there are viable answers and imediate solutions slavery can end entirely.

The writing styles of WuDunn and Bales differ entirely, with WuDunn taking the descriptive approach and  Bales taking on the approach of unwavering reform supported by hard facts.  WuDunn ultimately being the more eloquent writer and speaker conveyed her points almost theatrically.  While Bales is more on the level of a businessman making a presentation.  This being said it is important to remember that although WuDunn  did succeed in dominating the pen, it was Bales who flourished in the content.  The Universal Declaration of Human Rights mirrors his ideas perfectly, like in Article 4, where it states , “No one shall be held in slavery or solitude…”.   Bales, like these leaders, came up with a business plan to abolish slavery.   He gives the numbers of what it would cost and he further goes into detail comparing it to similar costs of purchases Americans buy without even thinking twice.  The presentations as a pair were extremely informative, making the reader look in the eyes the very things most try to  avoid. Having to look an uncomfortable and demeaning problem dead on is hard yet necessary, and WuDunn and Bales are inspiring for bringing this harsh, cruel topic into light.

Bibliography

Bales, Kevin. "How To Combat Modern Slavery." TEDGlobal 2010. Web. 20 Apr. 2014.                                              <http://conferences.ted.com/TEDGlobal2010/program/>.

The Universal Declaration of Human Rights, § Article 5 (1948). Print.

WuDunn, Sheryl. "Our Century's Greatest Injustice." TEDGlobal 2010. Web. 20 Apr. 2014. <http://conferences.ted.com/TEDGlobal2010/program/>.

First Draft Essay #1 TedGlobal / Modern Slavery

Rachel Wallace

Professor Jordan Hayes

English 1A

April 18, 2014

Word Count : 991

Obliterate Modern Slavery

The issue of modern day slavery is one filled with secrecy and sorrow.  It is filled with  infernal corruption, pure hate, and unqualified discrimination.  The official definition of slavery is the utter domination of one human over another.  Often times it involves young, helpless, children forced to work in extremely harsh conditions for no pay.  Other times it is an innocent woman forced to work in the sex trade industry.  These forms of slavery exist because of three major benefactors, which are rapid population growth, the corruption of local government, and extreme poverty. These topics and more are compared and contrasted by two speakers, Cheryl WuDunn and Kevin Bales in their individual speeches presented live to an audience at Ted Global.  Both speeches present an argument for change, both for the abolishment of the modern slave industry, or human trafficking as it is commonly called.  WuDunn focuses on describing the success that follows the miserable lives of a few underprivileged woman she encountered for her donations advertising plee.  Bales quickly acknowledges a few key subjects of his success stories, keeping his main focus and presentation on the need to abolish slavery effectively and humanely.  All the while spelling out the exact steps we need to take as a global community to achieve such a goal.  

In the transcript from Sheryl WuDunn’s presentation at Ted Global she discusses many different examples of rags to riches stories created from small outside investments. The stories WuDunn tells to validate her plea for donations directed toward discriminated woman pull at the heart strings.  They make you feel bad and this draws on the appeal to nurture.  You just want to scoop them up and make everything better.

 In the Ted Global presentation by Kevin Bales, he shares his thoughts of how to combat modern day slavery.  He offers his personal opinions, having visited five different countries from across the globe to track down these hidden societies. In doing this he was able to arrange numerous meetings with the slave owners as well as interview the slaves.  He acquired vast amounts of interpersonal reflection  through his hands on approach to a more intimate knowledge of slavery in the 21st Century, which he expresses in the speech. All the while backing it up with data from seasoned professionals. This assuring the target audience its validity as well as the pull of their heart strings from the eye opening facts.  Bales appeals to us using many of the basic appeals for advertising.  He uses the need to nurture when he speaks of the little boys being forced to fish in Ghana.  It was most prominent when he showed the video featuring his ex-slave friend and hero, James Kofi Annan.  The clip portrays a small child with his head deformed from being abused while in slavery.  Annan states, " He was hit with a paddle in the head…" this clearly showing one of the many horrible things that happen to these boys on a daily basis.  

   WuDunn's main argument is that women are discriminated against and need equal treatment not only for their well being but for the improvement and future success of the world.  She validates her claim with many examples of when donations have worked with amazing success stories.  Gives an example of when it hasn't, and moves on.  She uses emotion as a main advertising plea and evokes people's sympathy by arguing and presenting the details most wish would remain covered.  She uses an effective writing format which lets her display all of her main points beautifully in detail while still keeping a professional essay format.  She continues to stay on topic as she evokes her audiences emotions.  Then seemingly leads her audience down a path of discovery with her interesting style.  

   The argument Bales presented was one of a close minded viewpoint.  Bales is closed minded in the best way.  In the way that he can only see what is right and not accept what the opposing party views as logical.  The fact that he can read a flier and find the content so moving that he is willing to change his life and travel to five countries to see slavery from all aspect is inspiring.  If more people chose to get involved in something world changing like Bales the earth would be utterly amazing.  I found this speech to be extremely informative in the regards of a solution rather than really getting in depth into the problems.  I like that.  I think instead of speaking on the negative present and dwelling on the horrible past, it is best to focus on finding a solution for the future.  I like that Bales practices this as well.  The fact that there is at least one solution to this horrific problem is encouraging, and I really think that if people could get together and realize that there are viable answers and slavery can end entirely.

The writing styles of WuDunn and Bales differ entirely, with WuDunn taking the descriptive approach and  Bales taking on the approach of unwavering reform supported by hard facts.  WuDunn ultimately being the more eloquent writer and speaker conveyed her points almost theatrically.  While Bales was more on the level of a businessman making a presentation.  This being said it is important to remember that although WuDunn  did succeed in dominating the pen, it was Bales who flourished in the content.  Bales concisely lays out a step by step  business plan for the abolishment of slavery.  He gives the numbers of what it would cost and he further goes into detail comparing it to similar costs of purchases Americans buy without even thinking twice.  The presentations  as a pair were extremely informative, making the reader look in the eyes the very things most try to  avoid. Having to look an uncomfortable and demeaning problem dead on is hard yet necessary, and WuDunn and Bales are inspiring for bringing this harsh, cruel topic into light.